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MONDAY, JULY 04, 2011
ching. ching. gone.
a quarter of an hourly wage dissappears into the doorman's virgin cup.
even a strong man can't live off of pb and jam forever.


fisticuff swaggering , and old vinyl testimonials
pretty girls idolizing betty page.
Who will cut your hair, if everyone present is dead?

amputated audience thumping jazz-like.
only got a right leg to spare.
upper bodies remain solitary
out of sync like so many modern encounters, and lovers.
resolute waist resisting the music.
war not on anyone's mind.

one armed primitive fist pumping--
as marilyn monroe confesses her sins from the loud speakers.
poor JKF is dead—won't see that great pussy no more.

drumsticks rain down like hail on saints.
god bless.
I am the anti-christ.

pissed tributaries run off porcelain mountains.
don't these future bad cops know how to aim?
Christ.
what would mother think?
fuck it--beer mouth wash is a preview to 21rst century oral hygiene

this band sucks balls.
margie smells sweet--perhaps it's something she brought from Russia.
bolshevik nations shifting from revolutions to pomades?
America has won.


sing rough sex like, my man,.
huffs-UFF! UFF!
those zombie mother fuckers still remain @ rest.
go home and check off your existential tallies.
statuettes gyrating, afraid to touch—afraid for an emotional connection.
again dead voices crackle up from behind.
lament. lament with me.

gloomy neon orange ear pieces dances with me.
sweet come on, but
when did man invent such bull shit.
dear, sir, don't whine:
“Why can't we all get along?
cree indians have the answer.
Comments

Alamir

Alamir

Well well well.....welcome. I was just reading this on your Facebook and thinking it should've been posted here.

Out of curiosity, why did you choose to have only certain words grammatically capitalized? Sorrel does the same thing with her writing and claims she does it on purpose.. I'm just wondering what's the overall effect you're trying to achieve by starting a sentence with a lower case letter?
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bobby_dang

BOBBY_DANG

dude.. you need to do some usability testing for this site. It took me forever to learn how to post. I wen t to the article section, thinking that's where you post it, but couldn't find out how.

'The post your entry' is too high up, and blends in with your logo. I assumed it was background. You might consider placing it somewhere more conspicuous.

Also, have you tried making a new account lately? It takes 3 minutes before your ajax login screen appears.

Alamir

Alamir

I thought that because it's up there most people will see and get it immediately. Where else do you suggest we put it?
..and I'll test out the login.

bobby_dang

BOBBY_DANG

overall, I'm impressed with how much you've cloned facebook.. Did you, or your bro program everything?
REPLIES: Alamir

Alamir

Alamir

Replying to bobby_dang:
My bro did. We didn't clone, we perfected the facebook design....and then added to it.

NatalieC

NatalieC

Your third stanza may be the most accurate 6 lines I've read all week.
I like this.
REPLIES: bobby_dang

bobby_dang

BOBBY_DANG

@Alamir.. ack I wish I lived near you guys, so we could rock a startup.


NatalieC

NatalieC

Replying to bobby_dang:
That's amazing! why wasn't I there?
Or you?

Sorrel

Sorrel

Replying to Alamir:
Alamir, why must you bring my writing technique into question? It is poetry -- grammar is used to accentuate, not exact. Learn to appreciate sound before syntax.
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Alamir

Alamir

Replying to Sorrel:
I never said whether poetry was to accentuate or exact. I merely asked why you chose to accentuate the way that you did. I think your commenting on me having to "learn to appreciate sound before syntax" makes no sense. As there is little, if any, sound related to proper capitalization, it's all visual. So whether I like sound before syntax or vice versa is irrelevant to my initial question.
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Sorrel

Sorrel

Replying to Alamir:
HOW ABOUT NOW
Do you really think there is no difference in the way you read CAPITAL LETTERS
It isn't just visual.
Don't try and disregard my answer because you don't see the connection. Find the connection, and expand your experience.
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Alamir

Alamir

Replying to Sorrel:
I wrote "proper capitalization" but maybe I should be more specific that my question was never in regards to All-Caps but to using capitals for the first letter of a beginning sentence. As I said, there is little difference in the sound of the word "Those" to the sound of the word "those," there may be some but it's subtle, the difference you're observing is much more in the visual.



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