So often, we are
barricaded by numbers
figures, with no form
I wondered at these
Simple constraints on my words
and my thinking too
Though simple (they are)
so too, simple, is a knife
and oh, how it cuts
Like a knife, are bars
Never moving but always
Holding us somewhere
Being held, unloved,
In Arbitrary places
Static freezes tears
Fight, fight, fight, fight, fight
Tears and sympathy: prizes
for the losing side
Break bars, dull knives, fight
Be the unseen stone inside
The prisoner's gut
You'll like it more if
You only learn to relent
Fighting makes sorrow
Fighting makes sorrow
sorrow leads to misery
Can't we just make tea?
A warm cup of tea
Let it soothe you, heart and soul
and dull your senses
No, no, no, no, no
Stay sharp, stay strong: like bars and knives
Cut the soothing voice
Panacea. Death.
Calm, Contentment and stillness
No more violence
Just five and seven
Give the children simple toys
They will never stop
Never stop playing
Playing is a harmless game
Games cannot hurt them
Let them see you play
With just your five and seven
They will not suspect
You can break iron
Now shatter their well made swords
Upon your simple stone
Hidden in our gut
The mighty stone unchecked, weighs
Just five and seven
Comments
Sorrel
I don't follow the logic of the development in this poem.
I'm curious about whether I'm too stuck on the exact meaning of each sentence to fully appreciate anything you're actually trying to say. Don't take this the wrong way, but I think that if I were illiterate, and not stuck on the logical progression of phrases, this poem would yield much more.
Sorrel
JACKSON
To add (if anyone ever reads this again): the poem is organized into five haiku, seven haiku, five haiku: a haiku haiku
The middle section addresses the fight against form. The irony is that the emphatic "Fight" and "No" are repeated to fit into the form.